[AFS3-std] draft-wilkinson-afs3-rxgk-02

[Dave Botsch]

Hi. See inline below...

On Mon, Feb 20, 2012 at 07:38:00PM +0000, Simon Wilkinson wrote:
> 
> On 17 Feb 2012, at 18:50, Dave Botsch wrote:
> 
> > Just started reading this over.
> > 
> > First thing that jumped out of me, in section 5. "Token Format"
> > 
> > grammar: "specific to an particular application" ... an should be a\
> 
> I'll fix this.
> 

Great.

> > 
> > the statement: the client, which just transmits it from server
> >   to server
> > 
> > is kind of funky in its wording. I'm guessing this means the client
> > receives the token from one server and transmits said token to another.
> 
> That's exactly what it means - having received a token from the key negotiation service, the client just passes that token, untouched, to the application server.

So, I would request this be reworded just to be clearer on what is
happening.

 

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